I like the mood of your sketch. The hazy quality feels quiet and mellow. The images on the jars seem pretty profound/symbolic. I'd make sure they are very carefully rendered. You might reconsider the height of the different jars. Right now it makes a sort of staircase that leads off the right side of the page. Maybe have them all contained within the image frame? Or send another jar partly off the left side? The song talks about lighting candles in first person. What if you had some suggestion of the person lighting these candles in the picture like a hand or a match? Just a thought.
Compositionally, I'd do a few quick thumbnails in full value. Figure out how to vary the value of the candle jars, not just vary the size. Maybe only one or three of them are lighted, and the others rendered darkly. One can be brighter or more prominent than the rest. They can run off the side, but right now they feel a bit cramped with a too-near tangent on the left edge of the picture.
Also pay close attention to how you might render the images on the glass. Are they raised lines? Or etched? Can you do some quick studies of similar glass-art techniques? It would certainly help to bring in an element of observation here, especially if these jars don't really exist. You'll want them to be convincing.
Also some quick color studies will help. I would keep the color mostly restrained, with a dominant hue overall. The different colors of glass can bring in some cools to what would otherwise be a warm-dominant composition. But remember to restrain most of those colors so they don't get out of hand.
I like the mood of your sketch. The hazy quality feels quiet and mellow. The images on the jars seem pretty profound/symbolic. I'd make sure they are very carefully rendered. You might reconsider the height of the different jars. Right now it makes a sort of staircase that leads off the right side of the page. Maybe have them all contained within the image frame? Or send another jar partly off the left side? The song talks about lighting candles in first person. What if you had some suggestion of the person lighting these candles in the picture like a hand or a match? Just a thought.
ReplyDeleteCompositionally, I'd do a few quick thumbnails in full value. Figure out how to vary the value of the candle jars, not just vary the size. Maybe only one or three of them are lighted, and the others rendered darkly. One can be brighter or more prominent than the rest. They can run off the side, but right now they feel a bit cramped with a too-near tangent on the left edge of the picture.
ReplyDeleteAlso pay close attention to how you might render the images on the glass. Are they raised lines? Or etched? Can you do some quick studies of similar glass-art techniques? It would certainly help to bring in an element of observation here, especially if these jars don't really exist. You'll want them to be convincing.
Also some quick color studies will help. I would keep the color mostly restrained, with a dominant hue overall. The different colors of glass can bring in some cools to what would otherwise be a warm-dominant composition. But remember to restrain most of those colors so they don't get out of hand.